Comments Made by The Seminary Gang
^{During the posting of chapters of the First Novel.}


Chapter II

A/N: A big thanks from the Gang to Reaper and Mr. Satire for their reviews. And now a message from Jon, aka TT-da-Laminite;

So do you all like the second chapter? Read and review just incase we missed something, well I have been leaving ‘Canadian hate notes’ this is not because I hate Canada I like the bacon….on Pizza. The full Canadian rant is at my home page and also this page has exactly 2000 words on it, try counting!

Love TT-da-lamanite Aka J. Tree Top


Chapter III

A/N: Hey everyone! Yes, believe it or not, Kenzi was the one that invented the Nephite Ninjas (scary, huh?) Many thanks to Ollie May and Mr.Satire.Your reviewsmake the world go around.Anyways, here’s a message from Brian D.

Things not to say to cop; “Before you arrest me, maybe Mr. George Washington could change your mind.” “Care for a donut?” “You’re not gonna check the trunk, are you?”

This is Jon:

Got one more for you! Cop pulls a guy over and says, “Your eyes are dilated, you been drinkin’?” Guy replies, “Your eyes look glazed, you been eatin’ donuts?”

Also,

Stupid Canadians!

Love Jon.

I’m uber special, yet I get the one font that no one really pays too much attention to. "pouts" J/K. Anyways, my favorite was “you just had to try out the new siren didn’t you” (actually my favorite was the one about the handcuffs but "ahem")

I’m still a little sad that we didn’t get to have Chicken Ninjas like originally planned…”HIYA! HAVE SOME CHICK’ EN” but the whole “Noah’s bed slaves” thing being edited out was a fair trade. (P.S. Jon, You will die for that eventually…)

-Lots of Luff! Kenzi…


Chapter IV

A/N: Sorry this took so long to get out, but it’s been kinda busy up here in Pierre (Vietnam War Memorial dedication). Hopefully the next chapter will be out much sooner. Anyways, a big thanks to Mr. Satire and Ollie May for your reviews, and hope that you guys enjoy this installment. Before saying farewell, we’ve got a couple of one-liners for you…

(Richard): “Nothing is fool proof to a sufficiently talented fool.” “IRS: We’ve got what it takes to take what you have got.” “For every action there is an equal and opposite criticism.”

(Brian): “Save the whales, collect the whole set.” “Few women admit their age, few men act it.” “The early bird gets the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese.”

(Jon): “The word “gullible” isn’t in the dictionary.” “I can tolerate pain until it hurts.”

(Kenzi): “A penny earned is a penny wrenched from a man’s pocket.”


Chapter V

A/N: So, as our good friend Mr. Satire noticed, Jon has become somewhat of a desensitized killer. Well, if it’s any consolation, he was that way before being kidnapped (he was the one who wrote Brian off as dying early on). Anyways, here’s some pronunciation from Kenzi.

"She-tah-key mushrooms" K. O.


Chapter VI

Authors’ Notes

Richard: Believe it or not, back when we were first doing the story in episode format, Kenzi wrote most of this chapter, thus introducing our new friend (the mysterious time-traveling pizza-eating commander). To Reaper’s question; yes it really was wine. That darn Jon…

Kenzi: I love homecoming week! (Kenzi gets to dress like a boy, a desperate housewife, and be all green!)

Jon: So how do you like? Tree Top be mean man. Woot!

Brian: Freak took my woot. : (


Chapter VII

A/N: Cliffhanger! Yep, where oh where has the gang gone? In case you’re wondering, the title for Chapter 6 is in reference to the James Bond movie of similar title. When we first wrote that episode, Jon and Brian were supposedly pretending to be secret agents while invading the Lamanite Camp, but it didn’t really stick. As always, big thanks to our reviewers;

Ollie May: Thank you for your support in the story, and I’m glad you’ve liked it thus far. Sorry to hear about collage, but I guess that’s life. Thanks again!

Ben Wuest: Yes, it is good to see your return to Fiction Press. So what, oh what is your mysterious new project? I do hope that you continue your series with Coran and the Time Keepers, but do look forward to your next story.


Chapter VIII

A/N: Aero…sounds like Oreo…me likes Oreos…

Kenzi: I like Oreos too. MILK!

Jon: ARRG! The whole chapter was basically my idea! Except for the entire thing, yeah. So… Stupid CANDIANS!

Kenzi: Candieans, Jon? I didn’t know northerners were made of candy! Saweet!

Jon: Nice.


Chapter IX

A/N: Heh, heh, heh; Jon hated that one…Well, unfortunately due to the fact that school is in full swing, we’ve been getting less and less reviews. Also, due to this same affect, chapters are going to start coming out much slower. Expect Chapter 10 some time next week, but after that…well, we will see.

However, I have noticed that a certain little Ms. Critic has become interestingly attached to the story. Thank you for pointing out those “errors”, as we do need some critiquing every now and then. Just remember to keep reading!

Oh, yeah. Kenzi has a remark to make.

Kenzi: Easter Eggs are wicked sweet…


Chapter X

(Richard): Two things; first, sorry that this is kind of short. This is one of the shorter chapters in the story. Second, you’re probably wondering how the heck something this short could take so long. Well, let’s just say some of us we’re a little slow in the editing process (Kenzi). We’re not going to say any names (Kenzi), but just leave it at slow production. My point is that we’re not trying to point fingers at anyone (KENZI!!!).

(Jon): Oi! It was a little, if not just small part, a wee bit Kenzi’s fault. Okay, maybe it was just more than a wee bit (just a little).

(Kenzi): Hey, I already apologized for this in Chapter 11. RAWR! “I like it…loud!” (Marie, A’marie)

(Richard): Also, we’d like to thank our faithful readers and reviewers. While we will still be leaving little commentaries after each chapter, we really can’t thank our reviewers the same way with all these new and upgraded features to Fiction Press. Any questions or comments will be answered through the “reply” feature, so don’t hesitate to ask about anything. However, we’ll still use this last time to thank those who did review during the last couple of weeks:

EmptynessFilled: I’m glad you’ve become interested in the story and hope that you’ll continue to read…

Mr. Satire: Thanks for your praise to the work! I do hope you can keep with the story, because you are one of our best reviewers. Thanks again!

Reaper: Well I guess this answers your question to Jon and the car. We really weren’t comfortable with Jon making off with the car (even if he was), but mostly we wanted to do the bus-scene, so that’s why he gave it up so easily.

jadeisms: Glad to see that Kenzi is getting some of you guys into reading this story too. You got an account, so does this mean we’ll see some stories coming from you? Anyways, like I said before, we talked about doing one this year, but shhhhh (that’s a secret for now).

Max Radio: Much tanks to your thoughts and comments. Hope that you’ll keep going as the story continues, because we welcome your input.

Hopefully the next chapter won’t be stalled…


Chapter XI

(Richard): Yeah, leave it to the two sane people to save the day… Brian was not happy back in the early days when we wrote him as no longer in ghost form, so the rest of us got a good laugh.

(Kenzi): Boom! Hmm, currently in math class and not liking it. Stupid math! Grr… Oh well, Mrs. Walz will bow down to me someday. Sorry bout the delay. Blame it on my messy locker…XD

(Richard): Oh and one more thing; it is that wonderful time of the year when us NaNoWriMo people have to work our butts off all November. This may or may not contribute to the slowness of production, but we’ll see…


Chapter XII

(Kenzi): Chapter…so…freaking…short! Grr…science test today, I got this stupid thing done…pretty much… Dance, Dance!

(Richard): Our last chapter was one of the most interesting to write, but one of the worst to post up on Fiction Press. After all the typos we managed to get in it, I was surprised our editors had the will to go on. If you managed to survive Chapter 11, then more power to you. Also…

Hello and greetings to Ms. Critic. We haven’t heard from you for awhile, and we (especially Double-A) were so glad to hear from you again (does this mean we’ll hear from Ranger Wade?). Sorry it has taken so long to update, but what can you do? I don’t know whether you read the reviews or not, but Double-A left you a message there. That would probably be the easiest way for the two of you to talk, is through the review box.

Anyways! To the rest of our reviewers; you have our sincerest thanks for staying with us this long. As of November 6th, the last chapters had been written up, and are going through the editing process as you read this…At least I hope they’re doing that…


Chapter XIII

(Richard): Okay Jon, you have a lot to say about your books of Jon…

(Jon): Yes I do, but I am gonna space it out over a whole 2 chapters! So yeah… Have fun with all that crap…and I like the bible… So yeah… Canadians.

(Kenzi): Umm… Jon… You’re a racist monkey, you know that? I had to edit some of your A/N… Holy pile of crap, this sub has something up her… Well, you know what I mean… Why Canadians? …Why not Turks?

(Jon): Okay one we can’t seem to take over the Turks, we can take over the Canadian, two the whole monkey comment makes me believe that you believe in evolution, you’re Mormon that’s not a good thing, I say the rest over the next chapter.

(Richard): Wow Kenzi, I never knew you were an evolutionist. What’s next? World domination?

(Jon): Shut up.


Chapter XIV

(Richard): Okay, another hello to Ms. Critic and her little friend Ranger Wade (has he read the entire story so far?). Kind of off the subject, it seems that during the editing process some of these chapters fell into other people's hands. Specifically, Kenzi’s friend Jade (who has also taken up editing too) said the comment we put down for Kenzi in the last chapter. However, this doesn’t mean we won’t hear more from her…maybe.

(Jon): I’d rather not comment; just read.

(Kenzi): What the heck, Jade, you’re not supposed to comment! You’re not even an author or author inspirer in this story! Now if Jon’s wife was named Edaj Nameen and you two had 7 kids then yes, comment. Until then though, RAWR! Oh, and I am not an Evolutionist. Jon is just a very well trained monkey.


Chapter XV

(Kenzi): Boof! Goodbye! I love you!

(Jon): Thanks Kenzi, anyways; stupid Turks.

(Richard): Um, right… These author’s comments don’t make sense anymore… Anyways, yeah, I really wouldn’t like to be standing there after covering an army with crap. They’ve got swords, and all I’ve got is a stupid little shot-glass. See, this is what happens when you let Jon get into the heavenly workshop… Let’s just hope he doesn’t get into Hell’s workshop…

P.S. Only four more chapters! Expect Chapter 16 next Monday!


Chapter XVI

(Richard): What do we learn? Never get on Kenzi’s nerves! She’ll make you burn for it. As for Brian, heaven only knows what kind of horror to expect from him…

(Kenzi): Darn straight! Brian scares me with a time remote…boy. The Turkey stole Thomas’ ‘Fro! Darn, consider Jade burned, then her ashes, then her ash’s ashes. And then one more, cuz she’s a pyro. Lol. No she’s not… But we’re not getting into that little incident.

(Richard): What the heck?! How did Jade get in the author’s comment?!


Chapter XVII

(Richard): So, Jon’s grown out his hair to look more like an ancient prophet? Well he’s going to need to get some gray hair first. As for Kenzi, what kind of horrors lay in store for her? This is an interesting chapter to post, because I just got back from chasing Kenzi around town in a car ride (she forgot to bring an important book to seminary, we had to go back to her house to get it, she’d already been there and left, and yeah, major confusion of events). Anyways…

(Kenzi): Ah! I’m gonna explode! Boom! No, I’m just imaging the follow the prophets song with a verse about Jon in it…lol

(Jon): I have no comment since I haven’t read this thing for awhile…


Chapter XVIII

(Richard): Wow, long chapter; and, we’re almost done. For those loyal readers out there, we’ve seen much, we know much, and we’re now on the last leg of the journey. By now everyone should know everything, and there should be no hidden agendas, right? Heck, I don’t. A lot of people weren’t able to read due to school and such, so hopefully when the time of freedom comes they’ll get a chance to take a glimpse.

Oh, and one more thing. Those lines of code don’t really say what Dr. Smith translated them to say. But I will say this; they do say something…

(Kenzi): Oooh…Speshul. Side note, we changed my grandkid’s name because I figured, well, I’m not gonna be an Olson when I get married…So yeah. I’ll see if I can’t explain where Smith comes from… (BTW, that’s not gonna be my married name).


Chapter XIX

FINAL AUTHOR’S COMMENTS

(Kenzi): I’m…confused to be honest. It might have something to do with it being 4 in the morning; I’m not sure. “Ahem” Hooray! It’s over!

(Jon): Chapter 19, they didn’t add what I wanted to say, but it was one heck of a ride. It was worth it.

Brian: Jajajajaja, ya ya ya…

(Richard): And so it ends. Who’d thought that something so small would make it this far almost one year later? Well, I expect final thoughts, comments, and an honest report on your thoughts of the story. A big thanks to those out there who stayed loyal through thick and thin. This may be the end for now, but I feel we’ll be meeting again…



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